Oh wow, please, don't scrap this! This is really good! It could use some work, but I really love it!
For starters, I'd recommend better placement for the screenshots. Maybe move the render of Connor to the left a bit and move the screenshot group up. (and use screenshots from the actual game :P) Other than that, you should maybe make the colors more flashy, like raise the saturation or something. It looks pretty bland.
Muddi: Can I get some erotic dark magician girl play mats?