Orion finished - First sketches + Editing + Bakka mini series (29/05/12 Update)

[TwistedTinkerToy]

YoshiStar basically said everything I've been thinking from the beginning.

Also, I find it a little strange that you're doing a mini-series as well. Your attention should be on the main book, not some offshoot. And really, it just seems kind of overdone and pointless.

[Daemon]

Also, I find it a little strange that you're doing a mini-series as well. Your attention should be on the main book, not some offshoot. And really, it just seems kind of overdone and pointless.

This, if you want to do a miniseries, wait until after the main series is done.

[coolguy753]

You guys finally caught on<3

[YoshiStar]

YoshiStar basically said everything I've been thinking from the beginning.

Also, I find it a little strange that you're doing a mini-series as well. Your attention should be on the main book, not some offshoot. And really, it just seems kind of overdone and pointless.

Yeah, I've also been thinking this from the beginning. But everyone was going along with this without many questions, so I didn't raise any doubts.

[TwistedTinkerToy]

Yeah, I've also been thinking this from the beginning. But everyone was going along with this without many questions, so I didn't raise any doubts.

Literally exactly what I've been doing.

[Leegion]

I opened a Q&A thread a while back, if you had questions you should've asked me. I said I was an open book, ask me a question about the book if you feel it will have issues.

Don't hold back the questions and if you're all skeptical about it then I will not mind giving everyone a sample of my work. If you would all like to read a sample then I will not mind sending each of you a different sample from the book.

Here's the honest truth: Is it fully edited? No, of course it isn't. I still have to read through the whole thing yet, so I may find some issues myself. The next thing I want to say is yes, I'm shitty at writing on forum boards, I never use the correct punctuation because this is not somewhere I need to use it. It's not a book, it's not as if everything I write here is going into a published novel. I could go all out and utilize words that people don't wholly comprehend in an attempt to demonstrate my manner of writing. But I won't do that.

Here's the thing, I read a while back here on vgba that "every time I get close to finishing it I find some sort of excuse to start over again." and now that I'm finished, some of you are doubting that I know what I'm doing? I've been writing this novel for a decade, I have over 16 previous drafts to work with, I have spent countless hours going over each chapter with a fine tooth comb, scouring it for mistakes and the editing part (punctuation) took me 6 hours to go through, not to mention I found a few spelling errors and mistyped names, like orion rather than Orion.

So yeah, if any of you have doubts, I can send you a chapter and you can read through it yourself to check for errors. I still need a secondary third-party reader to review my work, so if anyone here wants the job, just say so and then you can see if my writing is "good" or "bad".

If you had questions and were holding back then you were foolish to do so, I've been asking for help for months but no one has been interested. Now that I finish though, a lot of people seem to be skeptical, those that wanted to read it seem to feel it will suck now because it was written so fast. I've been writing this for years, the "final draft" is just a more advanced version than the one I had been writing for 9+ months and ended at over 240,000 words. This one is the same, but shorter, as in 122,000 words shorter.

[Leegion]

I'd like to thank YoshiStar for pointing out some comma issues in the chapter I sent him. After reading through the chapter myself I clocked a certain amount of mistakes. As I said, I've edited it with punctuation and grammar checking, but I haven't yet edited the entire thing page for page. Will start right now, should get a few chapters done by the end of the day if I spend a certain amount of time on it.

[Magical]

I would love it if you would send me a chapter.

[Leegion]

I would love it if you would send me a chapter.

Sure thing.

[Leegion]

Clocking a fair amount of errors at the moment regarding some of the writing "The stones dropped into the ground" has been changed to "the stones descended into the ground". Ironed out most of the issues with the descriptive text. Magical has also clocked a few dialogue issues, such as commas and periods in the wrong place. Never noticed it when I was writing. I'm currently 2 chapters through the full edit.

[Leegion]

Managed to get halfway through the book with the editing today. Man! I've been searching this thing with a fine tooth comb for the previous 11 hours, it's more excrutiating than writing it. lol.

[Leegion]

The English teacher who has been helping me edit the book has informed me on the right placement of commas and period points. For dialogue that is.

Here's how (for those wanting to write):
"How? Whenever I witness this dream I always wake up panting." Orion said, afraid.
should be
"How? Whenever I witness this dream I always wake up panting," Orion said, afraid.

I should have it covered now, the editing should be pretty simple now I understand where to place commas and such. Didn't occur to me before that my writing style was a tad average, time to let it flow better.

[MattStar]

It's awesome that the English teacher is willing to help you out. That shit would elude me and I've never gotten less than an A on any English paper lol.

[Leegion]

It's awesome that the English teacher is willing to help you out. That shit would elude me and I've never gotten less than an A on any English paper lol.

I never even realised it and I passed my English exams with an A+. If I had released the book as it is people wouldn't read it, no, they'd use it for toilet paper. Story is good. Characters are good. Punctuation and proper use of grammar aren't that great.

[Leegion]

Ha! Guess what? Just found one of the dumbest errors in history within the first 2 chapters. Discovered that I mentioned Orion's birthday, turning 18 and all. However, his birthday is March 29th 170 4A. Book 1 takes place during 187 4A. I mention it during the summer as being a "few days away". So now I need to change his birthday to July 17th 170 4A and fix the dialogue.

All of the punctuation is edited now, just need to go over the book with a cautious eye to avoid any plot holes or errors. I've found a few mistypes here and there, along with this: As rose the next morning. There should be a "the sun" in there somewhere.

[Leegion]

Edited out all the punctuation issues. Rewrote a few segments. Reworded a few phrases. Word count dropped significantly after the editing today, just 9 chapters left to edit before I approach a literary agent. I could approach one now, however I want to make sure there's no issues first.

[Leegion]

13.09.12.

[ftoons]

good luck with the book, lee

[Spiderpig24]

September 13th?

[Leegion]

September 13th?

Yes. 13.09.12.